* HP:Healthy SP:Bursting MV:Full >
Romanda Sedai says 'They are half as tall as a man, with tufted ears and very large noses.'
I think this should be "half again as tall" or "twice as tall". This makes them sound like hobbits.
Re: Typos
Moderator: Aureus
Re: Typos
When Romanda talks about Ogier she says:
* HP:Healthy SP:Bursting MV:Full >
Romanda Sedai says 'They are half as tall as a man, with tufted ears and very large noses.'
I think this should be "half again as tall" or "twice as tall". This makes them sound like hobbits.
* HP:Healthy SP:Bursting MV:Full >
Romanda Sedai says 'They are half as tall as a man, with tufted ears and very large noses.'
I think this should be "half again as tall" or "twice as tall". This makes them sound like hobbits.
Last edited by Elysia on Fri Nov 08, 2019 10:34 am, edited 1 time in total.
Reason: Fixed.
Reason: Fixed.
Re: Typos
Found more. After saying lesson on wheel of time:
Seaine Sedai em makes a gesture, putting her two index fingers together.
And this after saying lesson on intro - should be rulers.
Yukiri Sedai says 'A whole hallway on the Blue level is dedicated to memorizing the rules who signed the Compact.'
After saying lesson on ten nations:
Yukiri Sedai em gestures at a map on the wall.
Seaine Sedai em makes a gesture, putting her two index fingers together.
And this after saying lesson on intro - should be rulers.
Yukiri Sedai says 'A whole hallway on the Blue level is dedicated to memorizing the rules who signed the Compact.'
After saying lesson on ten nations:
Yukiri Sedai em gestures at a map on the wall.
Last edited by Elysia on Fri Nov 08, 2019 10:37 am, edited 1 time in total.
Reason: Fixed.
Reason: Fixed.
Re: Typos
Zone: Fal Dara
Room: Outdoor Training Grounds
Mob: falconer???
Outdoor Training Grounds
This is a wide open field that is completely barren except for the few
rows of weapon racks lying around. The ground here has been hard packed
to provide solid footing for the soldiers of Fal Dara. To the west is
one of the four towers of Fal Dara and to the east the training grounds
continue.
[ obvious exits: E W ]
A hanging lantern lights the path.
A quiet servant awaits instructions from his master.
A master falconer is here, a bird perched on her arm.
A young man, stripped to the waist, stands here catching his breath.
A young man, stripped to the waist, stands here catching his breath.
* HP:Healthy MV:Fresh > l falconer
Garbed in clothes with woodland hues, this lean woman strides by with a
bird of prey gracing her arm. Various trappings of her station hang from
her belt for ease of access, among them a whistle, jesses, and hoods. Her
sharp eyes match that of her raptor, always appearing to be on the hunt.
Falconer is in excellent condition.
falconer is using:
<held> a small purse
<worn about body> a dark green cape
<wielded two-handed> an ironshod staff of oak
<worn on legs> a black pair of pants
<worn on feet> a pair of light leather boots
It seems there should be more to her name than just "falconer", especially given the upper/lower case discrepancy.
Room: Outdoor Training Grounds
Mob: falconer???
Outdoor Training Grounds
This is a wide open field that is completely barren except for the few
rows of weapon racks lying around. The ground here has been hard packed
to provide solid footing for the soldiers of Fal Dara. To the west is
one of the four towers of Fal Dara and to the east the training grounds
continue.
[ obvious exits: E W ]
A hanging lantern lights the path.
A quiet servant awaits instructions from his master.
A master falconer is here, a bird perched on her arm.
A young man, stripped to the waist, stands here catching his breath.
A young man, stripped to the waist, stands here catching his breath.
* HP:Healthy MV:Fresh > l falconer
Garbed in clothes with woodland hues, this lean woman strides by with a
bird of prey gracing her arm. Various trappings of her station hang from
her belt for ease of access, among them a whistle, jesses, and hoods. Her
sharp eyes match that of her raptor, always appearing to be on the hunt.
Falconer is in excellent condition.
falconer is using:
<held> a small purse
<worn about body> a dark green cape
<wielded two-handed> an ironshod staff of oak
<worn on legs> a black pair of pants
<worn on feet> a pair of light leather boots
It seems there should be more to her name than just "falconer", especially given the upper/lower case discrepancy.
Last edited by Elysia on Fri Nov 08, 2019 10:38 am, edited 1 time in total.
Reason: Fixed.
Reason: Fixed.
Re: Typos
Mob: a graceful warder
Zone: Various (CTF patrols)
A warder stands here, working sword forms.
Battle scars and worry lines edge a once-handsome face. His tall, wiry
build suggests a whipcord strength owned by those few who highly dedicate
themselves to physical training.
Can't see here, but there are two spaces between "build suggests".
Zone: Various (CTF patrols)
A warder stands here, working sword forms.
Battle scars and worry lines edge a once-handsome face. His tall, wiry
build suggests a whipcord strength owned by those few who highly dedicate
themselves to physical training.
Can't see here, but there are two spaces between "build suggests".
Last edited by Elysia on Fri Nov 08, 2019 10:40 am, edited 1 time in total.
Reason: Fixed.
Reason: Fixed.
Re: Typos
Brigands NE of Seandar
* R HP:Hurt MV:Weary > Cliff's Path
A path coming from the east, abruptly turns southward as the hill becomes
too steep to traverse to the west. The air is clear, and offers a startling
view of the lands around. To the west, a river can be seen winding lazily
north through the grassy wilds. Far to the southwest, Seandar is visible,
the spires of it's towers peeking just over the rolling hills. Directly
south, a flow of water seems to flow from higher ground to the east, and
the sound of splashing water is obvious.
[ obvious exits: E S ]
it's should be its
Could also probably remove the comma from the first sentence, as its a weird pause
* R HP:Hurt MV:Weary > Cliff's Path
A path coming from the east, abruptly turns southward as the hill becomes
too steep to traverse to the west. The air is clear, and offers a startling
view of the lands around. To the west, a river can be seen winding lazily
north through the grassy wilds. Far to the southwest, Seandar is visible,
the spires of it's towers peeking just over the rolling hills. Directly
south, a flow of water seems to flow from higher ground to the east, and
the sound of splashing water is obvious.
[ obvious exits: E S ]
it's should be its
Could also probably remove the comma from the first sentence, as its a weird pause
Last edited by Elysia on Fri Nov 08, 2019 10:41 am, edited 1 time in total.
Reason: Fixed.
Reason: Fixed.
